Thursday, January 12, 2012

Is this a good golddigger story to write for my report?

If this is the outline, get rid of the first two lines. They tell the whole point of the story, so they are spoilers. If this is the story, it needs some major rewrite. No scenes, no dialogue, telling about how people think, rather than showing through action. Her character is not consistent with hating her parents. She might be embarred by them, but remember they wanted her to get ahead, so they are not keen on being poor either (who would be?) The professor is also a lawyer? Two college degrees tells me he would not be making "gentleman's agreement" with Theresa's father. He is either a gentleman and would ignore her advances, or he's ruthless and would use her up sending her back home to momma when he tired of her.

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